I love birds!

[vriad_lee]

Radha, my love
Indian turtle-dove
caught in the jungle
and taken
into the civilization's account
squats on the pavement
of a full city street

they say
she lives on vegetables
and pecks
white flour bread
not to get fat
but she's plump as it is
and she's black

if i had caught her in jungle
or taken, with naked hand
from her cage
it wouldn't matter a nail:
get her or not
she's impossibly free anyway
this impossible indian bird!

Comments

[lather2002.livejournal.com]

Kewl Poem ! You write it ? Later, going out to do a Photo Safari in the city.

[vriad-lee.livejournal.com]

yes, it's about an indian girl i loved. you really like it?

[marmaladious.livejournal.com]

they say
she lives on vegetables
and pecks
white flour bread
not to get fat

Those lines really caught me. I like this. For some reason, the words, "They say," add a lot of effect.

[vriad-lee.livejournal.com]

thanks! it's about a real girl from india and she really thought that white bread diet would keep her slim. white bread is considered the most fattening food after freedom fries and other fastfood crap in russia

[zzzing.livejournal.com]

i like it. nice assonance at the end of the first stanza. i like it all.

[marmaladious.livejournal.com]

It's easy to think that anything that tastes bland will be slimming. White bread is terrible, though.

[vriad-lee.livejournal.com]

ahhhh, i don't quite get that assonance thing. but thanks for the comment, thanks a lot!

[lather2002.livejournal.com]

Yes, I really like it !